Something I wrote for someone and am reposting for a response, and your opinion?

This is actually really detailed and deep, I like that. It gives me a feel of a troubled past and a new found lover, I like the mood that is set into this. It's incredible to say the least, maybe possible beautiful. I like how you used everything here, there wasn't a line that didn't fit. I rather do like your work here, I hope you continue writing poetry.